tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2487651032830668930.post504247177175711533..comments2024-03-24T16:53:26.189-05:00Comments on Big Anklevich: New StoryBig Anklevichhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09436070868726323659noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2487651032830668930.post-92080004121848275842010-07-16T13:13:59.563-05:002010-07-16T13:13:59.563-05:00Good job, Big. I think this would be exciting in ...Good job, Big. I think this would be exciting in audio. A couple minor points.<br /><br />Any purpose behind an exact time like 4:20? Was it a reference to Hitler's birthday, the police code for pot, or just a randomly chosen time? It felt specific.<br /><br />I think the last line "South America sounds nice this time of year" should be changed sounds->sounded.Bryanhttp://www.fullcastpodcast.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2487651032830668930.post-35894409238124862952010-07-16T12:28:56.016-05:002010-07-16T12:28:56.016-05:00I liked it, but sort of agree with choosing your o...I liked it, but sort of agree with choosing your own disease instead of using a known one. There is nothing specific about autism (that I know about) that makes it the only choice for you to use.<br /><br />I do sort of wonder why the wife stayed with the husband at the end of the story. Clearly she wants a child, but to me it seems she really wouldn't want one with that man anymore. If there is a social or governmental reason why she couldn't leave, maybe include that? I like the ending, but want a bit more background on why it's the way it is.<br /><br />And it was not too info-dumppy. A good amount, I think. Good job, over all.Jasonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17006622803604956176noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2487651032830668930.post-80950640857505480312010-07-16T11:10:06.780-05:002010-07-16T11:10:06.780-05:00You definitely did not infodump. If I were to hav...You definitely did not infodump. If I were to have one suggestion, it would be to not make the condition they're looking for something as familiar to us as autism. The idea that in the future we would have to be selective in which children we allowed parents to keep because of something that a huge number of children were born with makes for a great premise, but somehow it bothered me just a little that the thing they were born with was autism. I don't know, it's not a big deal.<br /><br />I really, really liked the story otherwise, though! I'm a big fan of this particular sub-genre, which I associate with <i>Children of Men</i> and, more recently, <a href="http://transmissionsfrombeyond.com/2010/03/transmission28/" rel="nofollow">Ten With a Flag</a>. Futures where there are these cruel, unfair rules, possibly even for a good reason, but you can't help but root for the character that's trying to buck them.<br /><br />Anyway, good stuff! Hope you get it published/podcasted somewhere, and that you keep on putting out more stuff like this!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16132674237614327721noreply@blogger.com